Some people think that to ensure a happier society, there should be only a small difference in the earninings between the poorest and the richest members. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I am not totally agree with
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statement. It is true that much earning will elevate our happiness in a
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. But, there are several aspect,
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earnings, to ensure a happier
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, as follows: tolerance, coordination, and humanity. Tolerance between each other will create a better
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. How can it affect to a
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? In a
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, there will be a various kind of people.
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people comes from different background. Tolerance in living side by side with each other will help to increase the level of happiness.
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aspect can be done through several activities,
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as: taking care of others living place if they are out of town to celebrate religious day, sharing food and beverage in celebration of big or religious day, and not intervere neighbour's important/religious day. Coordination to build a
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better to live is
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highly important.
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can be done through: create events together in a neighborhood and developing public facility to be better for everyone in the
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. Not only that, by increasing the sense of our humanity, we can build a better
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. How can we develop our sense of humanity? We can start by simple things,
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as helping others in need or giving others food when we cook too much. By developing these 3 aspects, I can assure you that the
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will be built better and happier.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Income disparity
  • Economic inequality
  • Social unrest
  • Cohesive society
  • Wealth redistribution
  • Stifle innovation
  • Social mobility
  • Progressive taxation
  • Financial incentives
  • Economic policies
  • Entrepreneurship
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