Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In my country, many
people
choose to live in town because many positive outcomes
such
as higher education and better healthcare are provided to the residents of a
city
more than
people
who live in rural
area
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areas
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. In
this
essay, I will argue that life in the
city
could gain more opportunities and
most
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more
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convenance
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convenience
. Advocates of
this
proposition believe that
city
-based institutions are always better than those in villages. Most children are affected by the environment of studies, if the facilities at school like tables, benches, chairs and other facilities do not support students it will make students cannot concentrate on their studies.
Moreover
, a chance to learn in higher education
is seem
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to be hard for
people
who live in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
For example
, my cousin studied in government schools in
village
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itself
then
for
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their bachelor
his bachelor
her bachelor
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bachelor
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and master he came to
city
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a city
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like Vientiane.
Additionally
,
healthcare
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the healthcare
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system is one of the most important conditions for many
people
to consider for their living, as it
not
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only for one person but
also
for everyone in their families
,
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because a big family
also
has
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a member
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member
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in
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different
rang
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range
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of ages
such
as babies, teenagers and especially elderly
people
are need
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to live near doctors.
However
, it is greater for everyone to live in an area that
have
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strong
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a strong
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healthcare system.
For instance
, in the summer of 2020, the rate of coronavirus cases in many countries
were
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higher in rural areas than in urban areas,
as a
result
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a large number of patients with coronavirus disease 2019 (COVID-19) were overwhelm under-resourced rural hospitals. In conclusion, I agree that living in a
city
provides better satisfaction and more convenience for many
people
to receive better medical management and increase
a
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chance
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chances
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in
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of
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good educational opportunities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
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