Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In my country, many
people
choose to live in town because many positive outcomes such
as higher education and better healthcare are provided to the residents of a city
more than people
who live in rural area
. In Fix the agreement mistake
areas
this
essay, I will argue that life in the city
could gain more opportunities and most
Correct quantifier usage
more
convenance
.
Advocates of Correct your spelling
convenience
this
proposition believe that city
-based institutions are always better than those in villages. Most children are affected by the environment of studies, if the facilities at school like tables, benches, chairs and other facilities do not support students it will make students cannot concentrate on their studies. Moreover
, a chance to learn in higher education is seem
to be hard for Change the verb form
seems
people
who live in countryside
. Add an article
the countryside
For example
, my cousin studied in government schools in village
itself Add an article
the village
then
for Correct pronoun usage
their bachelor
his bachelor
her bachelor
bachelor
and master he came to Change noun form
bachelor's
city
like Vientiane.
Add an article
a city
the city
Additionally
, healthcare
system is one of the most important conditions for many Add an article
the healthcare
people
to consider for their living, as it not
only for one person but Add a missing verb
is not
also
for everyone in their families,
because a big family Remove the comma
apply
also
has Add an article
a member
member
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members
in
different Change preposition
of
rang
of ages Correct your spelling
range
such
as babies, teenagers and especially elderly people
are need
to live near doctors. Change the verb form
need
However
, it is greater for everyone to live in an area that have
Change the verb form
has
strong
healthcare system. Add an article
a strong
For instance
, in the summer of 2020, the rate of coronavirus cases in many countries were
higher in rural areas than in urban areas, Change the verb form
was
as a
result
a large number of patients with coronavirus disease 2019 (COVID-19) were overwhelm under-resourced rural hospitals.
In conclusion, I agree that living in a Add the comma(s)
,result
city
provides better satisfaction and more convenience for many people
to receive better medical management and increase a
Change the word
their
chance
Fix the agreement mistake
chances
in
good educational opportunities.Change preposition
of
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