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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
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The chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 visits to and from the
UK
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 from 1979 to 1999,
while
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 the bar chart
represents
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shows
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 the
UK
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residents
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visit
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visiting
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 the most popular countries ( Turkey ,Greece ,USA ,Spain, and France)in the years given.Both of them are measured in
millions
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.
Overall
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, the line of
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visit
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visits
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 overseas by
UK
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 dwellers
show
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 a dramatical increase in the two decades,
whereas
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 the
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 from abroad who
visit
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to
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apply
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UK
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the UK
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 went up
over
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apply
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in the final years.
Moreover
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, the bar chart for
most
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the most
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 popular countries visited by
UK
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resident
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residents
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 in 1999
present
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presents
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 a high bar,
whereas
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 for
USA
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the USA
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 is half and lower for Greece and Turkey. With regard to the
visitors
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 from the
UK
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, the line for
visitor
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visitors
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 abroad by
UK
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residents
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start
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started
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in
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at
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 11 in 1979 to 55
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millions
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million
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 in the end, and
visitor
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visitors
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 to the
UK
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 by overseas
beguan
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began
 at 10
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millions
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million
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 and
increase
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increased
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 to25
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millions
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million
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 in
the
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apply
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1999
residents
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increase
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increased
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gradualy
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gradually
,
howover
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however
 the line graph for visitor abroad by
UK
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residents
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 is the highest.
On the other hand
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, the most
vitistor
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visitor
 who
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visit
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visited
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to
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apply
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UK
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 was from France, it was over 10
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millions
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million
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,
while
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, the
people
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number of people
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 from Turkey was the lowest in 1999 which was
approxiety
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approximate
 3
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millions
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million
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.There were two countries
had
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that had
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 the same
visitors
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 in two decades, it was nearly
4millions
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4 million
 from
USA
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the USA
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,
3.5millions
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3.5 million
 from Greece.
Moreover
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, 9
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
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 from Spain
was
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were
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 the second
more
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most
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, residents, visit, millions, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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