Some doctors show it is important for the old people to have regular exercise. However, some old people cannot get enough exercise. Why do you think this happens?How can old people be encouraged to exercise regularly?
Nowadays, the topic of elder
people
whether should do
Unnecessary verb
apply
exercise
, which is popular in modern society. It is a social problem , which probably influence
their Change the verb form
influences
body
health. And government
should pay more attention to Add an article
the government
these situation
and produce a plan to solve the phenomenon.
The reasons about elderly citizens lack for exercising are thatChange the determiner
this situation
these situations
,
the elderly senior citizens are busy with take care of grandkids and the power of Remove the comma
apply
body
is declining than before, so they not
have enough energy and leisure time to do Change the verb form
do not
did not
exercise
. For instance
, the
older Correct article usage
apply
individuals
prefer to spend time to watch
television programs or Change the verb form
watching
listen
videos, rather than Add the preposition
tolisten
do
Wrong verb form
doing
out door
sporting. After that, these Correct your spelling
outdoor
people
who are over 65 years old lack of
Change preposition
apply
the
awareness of Correct article usage
apply
exercise
, they do not know how compulsory and beneficial about do
Change the form of the verb
doing
exercises
. Lastly
, there are many elder individuals
are
disabled or get Correct pronoun usage
who are
Add an article
the disease
a disease
disease
, and Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
then
this
kind of people
their body
can not afford Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
them
to do physical sporting.
In order to relieve Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
situation, governments and their family members
involvement are necessary. If Change noun form
members'
member's
state
government set some award policy about elder Correct article usage
the state
people
do exercise
constantly, the activity about them to do
physical Change the verb form
doing
exercises
will be promoted. A typical example is that,
Remove the comma
apply
administration
can produce an application Correct article usage
the administration
about
Change preposition
to
teach
elder Wrong verb form
teaching
people
to do many different kinds of exercise
on mobile Fix the agreement mistake
exercises
phone
and elder Fix the agreement mistake
phones
individuals
should follow with Correct article usage
the teach
teach
, Replace the word
teacher
everyday
have one course and Replace the word
every day
people
should take a signature after class. When the
Correct article usage
apply
people
who is
over 65 years old continue doing Change the verb form
are
exercises
, the application will give some discount coupon or electronic money and so on. The other parts
is as important as the first one, that family members should give them some celebrate and encourage Fix the agreement mistake
part
to
do physical Correct pronoun usage
them to
exercises
. And send them some information about the benefits of sports, like increasing metabolism, Promote
blood and circulation, Wrong verb form
Promoting
prolong
life and so on.
In conclusion, the phenomenon of elder Wrong verb form
prolonging
individuals
lack of do Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
exercises
is very serious, it Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
due
to the average life Add a missing verb
is due
become
shorter. Administration and family members have to do some Wrong verb form
becoming
measure
to solve the problemFix the agreement mistake
measures
,
and keep going Remove the comma
apply
this
plan. Change preposition
with this
Lastly
, let every elder citizens have healthy
physical Add an article
a healthy
body
and optimistic mentality.Submitted by 915818382 on
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