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The plans illustrate the blueprint of a sports center in a university and how it will be designed after renovation.

The plans illustrate the current layout of a university
sports
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 centre
as well as
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 a proposal of how it may change after future redevelopment. Except for the gym, which will be expanded to the east, all areas surrounding the
pool
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 remain unchanged. Meanwhile, the outdoor courts on the west and east sides will be converted into a
sports
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area
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 with a number of businesses. The
area
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 surrounding the
pool
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, which consists of a reception on the south
side
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, a changing room on the east
side
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, and a seating
area
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 on the west
side
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, has not changed in terms of location or size. The only facility that will change is the gym to the north of the
pool
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, which will be expanded to the east. As for the west and east sides of the
pool
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area
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, those are currently used as outdoor courts. Both areas will be redeveloped and converted into a wide range of buildings.
To begin
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, the majority of the western outdoor court
area
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 will be developed into a leisure
pool
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 with a changing room and a
sports
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 shop. Meanwhile, the east
side
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 outdoor courts will be converted into a
sports
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 hall to the south of the gym expansion
area
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, with two dance studios on its east
side
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.
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, there is
also
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 another changing room and a cafe in
this
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area
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.

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