The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents.
The given line graph illustrates how many people live in urban places in four different countries which are the
Philippines
, Malaysia,Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020 and prediction till 2040. Unit is measured by the percentage At first glance, all counties' populations experienced an upward trend and will continue to increase. The population
rate
was majorly in the
Philippines
,
whereas
at the end
of the given time period, Malaysia will have a significant
rate
according to
the graph. Looking at the graph in detail, the
Philippines
' population
rate
lives
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in centres was just above 30% and the proportion of Malaysians was 30%, exactly in 1970. Next 3 decades, the rates had conflicts 3 times.
Then
, the Malaysian percentage dramatically increased, and it was almost 80% in 2020.
According to
experts' predictions, it will be increased to more than 80% in 2040.
Moreover
, the proportion of the
Philippines
decreased to a bit more than 40 %for 2 decades which started from 1990 to 2010.
Also
, that
rate
was equal to Indonesian citizens who live in cities centre in 2010.
Furthermore
, Thailand's percentage was just below 20% and it rose to around 30% in 1990. Following 30 years, it remained static and it was equal to the Indonesian
rate
in 2000. The proportion of Indonesia increased sharply and reached 50%.
Also
, it will jump to 60% in 2040.
Finally
, in 2040, the Thailand population
rate
will be around 50%.
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