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A friend of yours is living in another country. You would like to work in his/her country for a while. Write a letter to your friend and say – Explain why you would like to work in his/her country – Describe your skills and experience – Ask for some information about working in his/her country

#friend #country #work #skills #information
Dear Anjali, I hope you are doing well, I know you are living in
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 States of America since 2016 . As you know
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 dream to come
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 America for work since
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my childhood. I want to work with your company where you are working now .
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 ,As you well know about my skills and experience
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 have 5 year
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 in
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 care department.
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 m extremely passionate about my work in
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 m continue with my job .
furthermore
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 have
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certificate
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health
 care department. I want to know from you about your company
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 important documents which could use for job taken . Can you send me full details about it
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 I look forward to hearing from you, Best wishes,/Regards Kamaldeep
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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