Organized tours to remote places and communities is becoming more and more popular. Is it a positive or negative development for local people and the environment?

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diverge widely when it comes to whether it is beneficial to organise people to travel to distant
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a large scale.
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there are some detrimental impacts on these regions, I do believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand, the large number of
visitors
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would have some negative influences on these
places
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with, organizing plenty of travellers to remote
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might destroy
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fragile
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ecosystem since these
visitors
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might throw rubbish everywhere and even damage local cultural heritages, leading to irreversible influences on these regions.
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, these tourists would
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cause inconvenience to these remote
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and hinder the daily lives of local people.
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, they may cause digested traffic systems, overloaded tourist destinations and noisy nights, which impedes the living experiences of these
residents
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to a large extent.
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, these villagers might benefit a lot from
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a large number of
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. Having more
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could promote
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economy
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the fact that these travellers are more likely to
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plenty of money in these
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, they may purchase some souvenirs,
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products and they
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need to pay for the bills including accommodation and transportation, which boosts the economy of these underdeveloped
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regions. Organizing
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visits to these rural areas
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creates more job opportunities for local
residents
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, enhancing the stability of local
residents
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.
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, the youth do not need to find a job in urban areas and they are
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likely to stay at home, engage in the upbringing of their children, and even look after their parents, which is beneficial for a more stable society.
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a large amount of money from tourism would
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be used to improve local infrastructure including better education resources, wider roads and more advanced medical systems, which
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enhances the
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sense of well-being of these
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. In conclusion, I can understand the reason why people are concerned about
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tourism to remote
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, but for the majority of rural areas,
economy
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should be considered first.
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, I would argue that there are more benefits than drawbacks to developing
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tourism
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remote
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