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The given pie chart gives information about the primary reasons that people came to and left the UK in 2007.

The given pie chart gives information about the primary reasons that people came to and left the UK in 2007.
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It is noticeable that the main factor influencing
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 decision was employment. The biggest percentage is Definite jobs in immigration, with about 30% and in emigration significantly less, at 29%. The second large pie is the Formal study of immigration. But
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 figure is a very small number in migration, accounting for 4%. Accompany showed third big proportion less than a fifth.
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 pie considerably less, at 13%. Looking for work, No reason stated and others showed lower figures, at 12%, 6% and 11%. But
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 proportion was significantly large, at 22%, 18% and 14% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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