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The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.
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The line graph compares the amount of
acid
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rain
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 emitted in the United Kingdom by 4 separate factors during the period from 1990 to 2007. In general,
acid
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rain
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 caused by most sectors witnessed a decline within the observed period.
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 electricity, gas and water supply
as well as
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 other industries reduced their amount of
acid
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rain
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 discharge remarkably, the figure for that from domestic
together with
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 transport and communication seemed to be unchanged. In 1990, nearly 3.5
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tonnes
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 of
acid
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rain
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 were caused by electricity, gas and water supply, compared to only over 0.5
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tonnes
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 created by domestic. The percentage of that from transport and communication and other industries stood at 0.75
million
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tonnes
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 and 2
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tonnes
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 respectively. Over the next 3 years, there was a considerable decrease in
acid
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rain
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 emitted by home supplies. Meanwhile, the sum of that from the other 3 sectors remained unchanged. From that year to 2007, the transport and communication sector saw a slight fluctuation and
then
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 returned to their initial point, which stood at 0.75
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tonnes
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. Electricity, gas and water supply kept decreasing noticeably and reached a low of 0.5
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tonnes
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. Other industries
also
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 created less
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rain
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, their figure dropped to 1.25
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tonnes
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 in 2007.
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, domestic was still the factor which emitted the least
acid
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rain
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, which stood at only 0.25
million
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tonnes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words acid, rain, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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