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The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australia water consumption for last year.

The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australia water consumption for last year.
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The given bar graph illustrates the amount of
water
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 consumed in six cities in Australia,
while
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 the pie chart depicts the percentage of
water
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 distribution in 2014.
Overall
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, in terms of
water
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 consumption, Perth was the highest city spending
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last
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 year and
then
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 Melbourne and Canberra spent less
water
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 than the other cities. Meanwhile, the amount of Australian
water
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 was utilised mostly in the Agriculture field.
To begin
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 with, in 2014, the highest rate of
water
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 use was in Perth, with approximately 300 kilolitres followed by Brisbane with about 250 kilolitres.
However
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, Canberra was the least in using
water
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 by only under 140 kilolitres.
Also
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, Melbourne was just under 150, less than Adelaide and Sydney with 230 and 200 respectively.
Furthermore
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, in terms of distribution, Agriculture was the biggest sector using
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 with over half (67%) compared to the others.
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, the amount of
water
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 contributed to Mining just only 2 %, which was the least in Australia.
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, both Manufacturing and other industries had the same proportion, just 4 %.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average consumption
  • distribution
  • sector
  • domestic use
  • industrial use
  • agricultural use
  • urban areas
  • rural areas
  • trend
  • resource management
  • policy implications
  • ecosystem impact
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