Cohabitation is believed to bring huge advantages for young people since it enables them to fully understand each other before deciding to get married. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, most young
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tend to cohabit before they get married because they think it brings many benefits for them. Personally, I completely agree with
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statement for many reasons. There are various reasons young
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shouldn't cohabit before marriage.
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, moving in together before marriage can not be accepted by their parents.
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, they will have
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with their family members. Because parents always worry about their children's safety when they leave their house and cohabit with their
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.
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, when
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will make them have many conflicts
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not having the same viewpoint,
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, religious convictions, etc which can lead to
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up early. The important reason is the public condemnation and social stigma.
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, in VietNam, cohabiting women typically risk social stigma and loss of respect from their loved ones.
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, I think
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can try
cohabitation
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when they decide to get married. In modern life, non-marriage
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is not illegal, they can choose
cohabitation
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to make the best decision. When living in a couple, both
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will reduce
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burden.
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, they can understand each other better about their personalities,
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and interests
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or they give each other companionship and care.
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also
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reduces the risk of divorce after getting married for young
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because they have the process of learning and living together for a long time so they will make the most informed decision to get married. In conclusion, I believe that
cohabitation
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will bring many benefits for young
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before they decide to get married
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compatibility
  • habits
  • preferences
  • conflict-resolution
  • deal-breakers
  • financial responsibilities
  • domestic tasks
  • realistic view
  • emotional trust
  • deepening the bond
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