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Rich countries should not employ skilled people from poor countries, as poor countries need the worker more.do you agree or disagree?

#countries #people #worker
In
this
world
, where luck plays a major role in human destiny. It defines the circle around you, your family, community and
country
. On the one hand, those who are born in rich
countries
 can have a satisfactory
life
 with an average effort.
On the other hand
,
people
 from poor
countries
 must go the extra mile to have a normal
life
, and with hard
work
, they become skilled and qualified for jobs all over the
world
. They hope to immigrate to a rich
country
 and establish a new beginning where financial comfort is approachable. Unexpectedly, there is a vision adopted by many
people
 that rich
countries
 should not attract skilled
people
 from poor
countries
, as their homes need them more. In
this
 essay, I will make it clear why I disagree with their opinion. Nowadays, with the viral spread of the importance of success and wealth,
people
 are becoming more self-centred. The spirit of cooperation and kindness is declining sharply.
For instance
, ages ago, each house used to contain a family from three generations, where they live, eat and share their struggles together.
As a result
; they would survive whatever they go through.
In contrast
, at the present time, many humans live alone and face
life
 milestones on their own only.
Thus
, I believe that everyone should do what is best for himself
instead
 of taking responsibility for the whole
country
's development because he is the only one who is responsible for his
life
.
Additionally
, in each
country
 even if it is poor, there are always
people
 who are attached to it and do not want to leave to
work
 abroad.
Also
, some
people
 are overqualified for their
country
's jobs, and they deserve to
work
 for a highly-developed company which is rarely seen in poor
countries
. So, leaving a poor
country
 is not an abandoned action necessarily, it is just a way to look for self benefits and it won't make the
country
 empty of other workers.
In addition
, highly-developed companies have the right to seek employees from all over the
world
 if they have proper qualifications. Obviously, hiring skilled workers is not a selfish action, it's just doing what's good for the company's future itself. In conclusion, I believe that the
world
 is for us all, it's unacceptable to ban skilled workers from poor
countries
 to
work
 for companies in rich ones.
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