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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the worldwide pineapple producer for export purposes in several countries in the years 2009 and 2019, measured in millions of metric tonnes,
while
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 the pie chart illustrates the detailed percentages of spending for buyers on each pineapple in 2019.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that in 2009 the most exportation was produced by
Country
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B
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 and in 2019 from
Country
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 A.
Furthermore
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, the highest user spending was for distribution and retail purposes. To commence with,
Country
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 A and
Country
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B
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 dominated the most production in each year. In 2009, the number of pineapple exports stood only at about 1
million
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,
while
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Country
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B
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 was above 4
million
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, making it the highest exporter in that year.
However
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, the least came from
Country
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 C, which only accounted for approximately 1
million
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. Turning to 2019,
Country
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 A exported just above 10
million
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 pineapples,
in contrast
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 with
Country
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B
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 and C that merely below 2
million
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 and approximately 1
million
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, respectively.
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, the high expenditure for consumers was for distribution and retail regulation, which accounted for 35%, seven times higher than the producer charge, making it the highest fee among all categories.
Then
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, it was followed by profit expense at 18%, slightly higher than tax cost. Other than that, the spending was less significant, which was a maximum of 12% for each category.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, b, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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