Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the internet and they can study just as well at home. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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it is an irrefutable fact that educational institutions play
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role in a child's growth, a host of people opine
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schooling is not essential and a child can learn everything either from the web or at their house. I completely disagree
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notion. Hereby, I will provide arguments
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with relevant examples to support my stance. Out of all the
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reasons the strongest to support my stand is that schools have logically and sequentially arranged
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which not only
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to clear the basic concepts but
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understanding
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the related topics.
This
is especially important for clearing competitive exams.
For instance
, NEET-UG, JEE-MAINS and ADVANCE.
Besides
this
, the
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develop concepts and emotions of team spirit, kindness,
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as well as
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to
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in to
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a new environment.
This
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same conducive environment tends to face psychiatric problems.
For example
, anxiousness in
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, separation anxiety from the caregiver.
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young ones from
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different religions side by side which
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the feeling of secularism in them. It is predominantly important in a country full of religious diversity
such
as India.
On the contrary
, people argue that millions of articles and videos regarding each and every topic is available on
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which nullifies the need to send babies to
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school.
Apart from
this
, most students have home tutors and guardians to look after their studies.
This
method of education is favoured in certain countries like Fiji and PNG.
To conclude
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that despite the availability of varied videos and texts online,
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achieved by the pupils going to school would be far better.
Therefore
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