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People remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Why or why not? Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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The gesture of giving
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 is one of the great ways of making someone feel special and valued.
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 tradition has been alive in every society and community for ages. A
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 has a unique importance, no matter how small or big it is.
People
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 receive a special
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, and remember it for a lifetime, primarily because it has made them feel extremely happy and cherished. I totally agree. There is no financial cost attached to a
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, it is free. In life, everything has to be earned by putting in a lot of effort.
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 work hard to earn money which is used to purchase things in need. Recently, my line manager resigned and my team decided to arrange a farewell party for him where we gifted him a pair of brand-new joggers. He is athletic and often spends money to buy joggers to fulfil his passion for running, jogger pair was just the right
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 for him. His happiness was proof that special
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 are remembered because they help them save money. Some special
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 prove to be very beneficial because they turn out to be a solution to a problem. When
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 was college-going, my father gifted me a car.
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 was a big asset at that time, it helped me avoid the transportation challenges that my peers had to face
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 travelling by local transport which was in very bad shape. My father's gifted car helped me during all my college years. My entire college life memory has a special place for that car.
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 are always free of cost. There is no financial cost associated with presents. These are always a source of joy to
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, irrespective of their size.
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 the joy,
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 can have many great benefits that are valuable for
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. In every way, presents are remembered by
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.
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