Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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it is considered by some people that the best way to
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a good job is being a university graduate, there are others who think that starting work after
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better. In
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essay, I will discuss both
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and decide which one is better.
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with,
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leaving
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early can gain a lot of experience in their soft skills. Having to take care of themselves at an early
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, would make them independent person.
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, if
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doesn't study
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at
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properly after
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would be
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option.
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,
students
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who can not afford study expenses have
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preferred to get a job rather than continue coursework at the university.
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,
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student
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students
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can have a more stable life than the opposites.
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, studying longer can support
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student
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a
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better salary. The fact is that
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students
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who have good dilemma can have chances of working in a big company and earn
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far more than the ones who
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.
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, it is impossible to be a doctor, teacher,
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or lawyer
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without these
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degree
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.
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, studying at university gives more time for
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to develop. A lot of
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have helped themselves as well
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parents by working out to get some money and learn new skills in their free
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so as to have more choices in their careers. That means
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they can both widen their understanding and better build on their soft skills. In conclusion, I totally agree with
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statement. Because
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student
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a student
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at young age is not actually ready to live by himself meanwhile it is more potential for higher educational
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student
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to have a better career.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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