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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart presents data on the
income
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 distribution of US
households
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 from 2007 to 2015.
Overall
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, the number of
households
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 earning between $50,000 and $99,999 remained relatively stable over the eight-year period,
while
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 both the lowest and highest
income
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 groups (below $49,999 and above $100,000) experienced an upward trajectory. Notably, a majority of US
households
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 had an
income
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 of $100,000 or more,
while
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 the $75,000 to $99,999
income
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group
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 was comparatively negligible. The
income
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group
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 below $49,999 showed a minor increase in its numbers. In 2007, there were 25
million
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households
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 earning less than $25,000, slightly fewer than the 27
million
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households
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 earning between $25,000 and $49,999. By 2015, both categories had seen moderate growth, with approximately 28
million
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households
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 falling into each
group
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.
In contrast
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, the number of
households
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 within the $50,000 to $99,999
income
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 range was lower. These figures remained consistent throughout the period, with 21
million
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households
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 earning between $50,000 and $74,999, and approximately 15
million
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households
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 earning between $75,000 and $99,999. The highest
income
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group
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, earning more than $100,000, experienced the most significant change.
This
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group
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 demonstrated an upward trend, escalating from nearly 30
million
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households
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 in 2007 to a peak of 33
million
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 in 2015, despite a slight dip to 27
million
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 recorded in 2011. 211 words.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, households, group, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual income
  • Household
  • Income bracket
  • Trend
  • Significant
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Distribution
  • Shift
  • Proportion
  • Rise
  • Drop
  • Plateau
  • Peak
  • Fluctuation
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