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It is generally seen that most working people do not do enough physical exercise What are the reasons behind this? How can this problem be solved?

#people #exercise
Today, the discussion is all about most working
people
do
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not
do
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doing
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 enough physical
exercise
that's
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 the biggest issue
arriving
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occurring
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 nowadays.
firstly
,
let's
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 us know why physical
exercise
 is important for us, If we do physical
exercise
 every day it helps us
keep
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 more active and energetic throughout the day.
exercise
 is the best way to release your stress
exercise
 makes you
more calm
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. 
secondly
, the reasons behind working
people
 do not do enough physical
exercise
because
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 of their busy schedule or we can say
due to
 their easiness they feel very tired after coming home or we can
also
 say that working
people
 don't have a proper balance work schedule.
For example
: imagine there is a boy working in XYZ company and he wants back to his home and he has the plan to go to the gym but he feels tired so refuses to the gym that's called easiness no
activities
 and he will eat and sleep and repeat the same next day. now let's talk about how can
this
 problem be solved, 1st- There should be a balance between work and your personal life in your personal life you should take a few hours for
exercise
. 2nd- don't be so easy. 3rd- Every company should make every weak some kind of physical
exercise
activities
 to keep their employees more active.
people
 should play and join a gym and join yoga to keep themself more active.
while
 concluding my thoughts, I would like to say nowadays it's very important to do physical
activities
 it helps keep you more active and make you more calm and stress-free. so start doing
activities
 to keep yourself healthy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exercise regimen
  • personal goals
  • individual pace
  • convenience
  • motivation
  • peer pressure
  • structured classes
  • social dynamics
  • accountability
  • external motivation
  • self-discipline
  • peer support
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