The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
The given two pie chart
illustrate
the proportion of four types Change the verb form
illustrates
online
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of online
sales
in New Zealand between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, travel and film/music made up the largest proportion of the total online sales
in two selected years.In all types online
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of online
sales
there was only minimal change over the 10 years period.
In 2003, it is apparent that 36% of the total sales
were travel sector related, which was the major online sale of the year. However
, in 2013, a drop of 7% resulted in the same sector which became the second biggest portion of total online sales
. Film and music made the third largest portion of the overall
sales
in 2003 (21%) whereas
, in 2013, the figure rose to 33% which successfully hit the highest sales
.However
, over the decade, both figures had
declined sharply to 29% and 16% respectively.As for the sector of books, it had increased slightly from 19% in 2003 to 22% in 2013.Unnecessary verb
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