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The table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) wether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months

The table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) wether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months
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The table indicates the results of the survey of 6800 Scottish adults who were interviewed in the past 12 months.
Overall
, dancing, singing, playing musical instruments and acting had the highest number of participants,
while
 computer-based
activities
 had the least number of joiners.
To begin
, any performance which consists of dancing, singing, playing musical instruments and acting
were
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 mostly popular
activities
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activity
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 that
people
 aged 16-44 take
part
 in, with 35% of
people
 aged 16-24 and 22% of
people
 aged 25-44.
In contrast
, undertaking any crafts was mostly enjoyed in the age group of 25-74, at 22%. There was
also
 a major number of participants aged 16-24 who took
part
 in any virtual art
activities
, at 30%. Regarding the table, there was the least percentage of
people
 aged 45-74 who took
part
 in any writing and computer-based
activities
, at 5%, and a similar percentage was for
people
 aged 25-44 who chose to do any writing
activities
. In terms of the age group of 16-24, only 10% took
part
 in computer-based
activities
 and 11% chose to undertake any crafts and purchase culture.
It is clear that
 those
activities
 had the lowest percentage of participants in
this
 age group.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, people, part with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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