The table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) wether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months

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The table indicates the results of the survey of 6800 Scottish adults who were interviewed in the past 12 months.

Overall

, dancing, singing, playing musical instruments and acting had the highest number of participants,

while

computer-based

activities

had the least number of joiners.

To begin

, any performance which consists of dancing, singing, playing musical instruments and acting

were

Correct subject-verb agreement

was

show examples

mostly popular

activities

Fix the agreement mistake

activity

show examples

that

people

aged 16-44 take

part

in, with 35% of

people

aged 16-24 and 22% of

people

aged 25-44.

In contrast

, undertaking any crafts was mostly enjoyed in the age group of 25-74, at 22%. There was

also

a major number of participants aged 16-24 who took

part

in any virtual art

activities

, at 30%. Regarding the table, there was the least percentage of

people

aged 45-74 who took

part

in any writing and computer-based

activities

, at 5%, and a similar percentage was for

people

aged 25-44 who chose to do any writing

activities

. In terms of the age group of 16-24, only 10% took

part

in computer-based

activities

and 11% chose to undertake any crafts and purchase culture.

It is clear that

those

activities

had the lowest percentage of participants in

this

age group.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

196 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) wether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months

In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, most countries can improve the standard of living through economic development, but some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of this phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?

Scientists believe that by studying behavior of 3 years old children, we can predict if that child can become criminal in the future. To what extent is crime a product of human nature? Is it possible to stop children from growing to be a criminal?

Young people should spend more time on cultural activities such as music and theater and less time on sport. How far do you agree with this statement?

we cannot help everyone in the world that needs helps, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?