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Money manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.Do you agree or disagree?

#money #food #drink #products #level #sugars #health #people #sugar
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Finance-made
food
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as well as
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 oral
products
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 consume top levels of sugars which cause major health issues these
products
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 should be extra costly to motivate individuals to contain low
sugar
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 .
According to
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 me in
this
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 essay I m completely disagree. To commence with ,if
food
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 and oral
products
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 contain a low level of
sugar
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then
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 it is more beneficial for everyone To elaborate on it, if any individual wants to eat
sugar
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 but if every product contains a low amount of
sugar
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then
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 it is good for everyone .The levels of
sugar
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 may cause a lot of diseases like diabetes, higher blood pressure, and cardiovascular diseases .
For Instance
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 , A survey conducted by Heath organisations in 2016 found that 73 per cent population suffer from diseases which occur
due to
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 sugary
products
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Hence
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,
food
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 and drinks manufacturing companies should have fewer quantities of
sugar
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 contained in these
products
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.
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,if these
products
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 will be more costly than those individuals who can not afford them it's a major loss for companies
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 poor people can not buy these
products
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 . To explain , when nobody can buy these things because of expensive it is than what they eat and drink which made of
sugar
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 .To cite an example, if the company made expensive
products
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 nobody wants to buy them.
As a result
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 , Do not need to make
food
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 and drink to be more expensive it seems to be the same.
To conclude
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, Not only for health problems but
also
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 it is for poor individuals to buy these
products
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 more difficult that's why not too expensive just the level of
sugar
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 low
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