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The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries

The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries
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The table illustrates the amount of money gained in
fairtrade-labelled
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fair trade-labelled
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coffee
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 and
bananas
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at
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in
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 five different
countries
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of
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in
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 European through two different time periods which are 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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, in 1999 the most earning country from
trade
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the trade
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 of
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 are
Switzerland
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 and
UK
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, respectively.
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 in
the
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2004,
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UK
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the UK
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 got the biggest income
for
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from
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 selling
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 among other
countries
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. In 1999, the five
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countries
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countries'
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 average sales
on
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of
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coffee
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 are below 3
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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euros
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.
Switzerland
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 has the highest sales for it which
about
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is about
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 3
millions
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million
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euros
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 and the country that
earn
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earns
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least
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the least
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 money for spending
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this
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on this
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 good is Sweden with only 0.8
millions
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million
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euros
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. These
countries
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 mainly earn a lot of cash in 2004 compared
in
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to
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 1999 for
this
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 trading with
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UK
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the UK
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 got over twenty times higher
earning
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earnings
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 to about 20
million
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euros
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,
likewise
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the
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apply
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Switzerland
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 which got doubled
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their earning
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earning
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earnings
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 to 6
million
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euros
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.
Whereas
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 sales in Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden
are
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increased slightly to only 2, 1.7, and 1
million
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euros
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, respectively.
On the other hand
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, for the
bananas
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 trade. In 1999 and 2004,
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UK
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the UK
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earning
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earned
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 the most compared to four other
countries
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to
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apply
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over tujuh kali
lipatnya
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lipaemia
which
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about 15 and 47
million
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euros
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, respectively. Meanwhile,
Switzerland
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 and Belgium
earning
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earnings
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 in
bananas
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 are growing significantly
which
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about over five times in 2004 to 5.5 and 4, respectively.
On the other hand
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, Sweden and
Denrmark
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Denmark
facing
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faced
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andescending
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descending
condescending
 tendency
trade
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to trade
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 in 2004 to 1 and 0.9, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "likewise, on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, bananas, countries, switzerland, uk, euros, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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