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the table below gives information about the underground rainway systems in six cities Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant

the table below gives information about the underground rainway systems in six cities Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant
The given table shows information about
development
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the development
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 of the underground railway system in six different
country
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countries
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along
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from
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 1863 to 2001.
Overall
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, the
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city’s
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cities
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 depict different information about
date
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the date
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 opened,
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a kilometer
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kilometer
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kilometre
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 of
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route
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the route
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 and amount passengers per year (in million).
Furthermore
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, there
are
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is
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 news that interesting to
giving
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give
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. It is
sum
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the sum
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kilometer
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kilometre
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 of
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route
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the route
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 in
London
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 and
total
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the total
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passengers
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number of passengers
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 per year in
Tokyo
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.
To begin
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 with the table,
the
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apply
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London
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city
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 shows
rate
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a rate
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higher
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of higher
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kilometer
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kilometre
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 of
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route
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the route
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 (394). It is become
value
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the value
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most
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apply
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peak compare with
other
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another city
other cities
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city
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, Paris (199),
Tokyo
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 (155), Washington DC (126),
Kyoto
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 (11), and
Los
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Angeles
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 (28) respectively. Meanwhile, the
city
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 lower is
Kyoto
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.
This
Linking Words
 is just up 11
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Kilometer
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Kilometers
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 of
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route
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the route
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.
Furthermore
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, there are
describe
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described
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 total
passenger
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passengers
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 in six
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city
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cities
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. It is
Tokyo
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 (1927), Paris (1191,
London
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 (775),Washington DC (144),
Los
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Angeles
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 (50),
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Kyoto
Correct word choice
and Kyoto
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 (45)
Respectively
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respectively
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. From the data,
the
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apply
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Tokyo
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city
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illustrate
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illustrates
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most
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apply
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higher compared with
other
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another city
other cities
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city
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.
the
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The
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 data
really
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is really
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 significant
comparison
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compared
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 with
London
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, Washington DC
Los
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Angeles
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 and
Kyoto
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.
Moreover
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, the
city
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Paris
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of Paris
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still
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is still
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 slightly
distance
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distant
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.
Meanwhile
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,Meanwhile
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 the
city
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 most Lowes shows by
Kyoto
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city
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 (45),
Linking Words
that
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which
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 is
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
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not far different
with
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from
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Los
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Angeles
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city
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. (50)

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometer, route, london, tokyo, city, kyoto, los, angeles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway systems
  • cities
  • data
  • number of lines
  • number of stations
  • annual passengers
  • highest
  • lowest
  • developed
  • comparisons
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