The charts below the show how the average household budge was spent in 2 different years.

The charts below the show how the average household budge was spent in 2 different years.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below the show how the average household budge was spent in 2 different years.
Essay type: Pie chart ๐Ÿ“ˆ The two pie charts ๐Ÿ“‰ illustrate 6 categories of household spending ๐Ÿ’ฐ retails (food, clothing, housing, healthcare, transportation and other) over the period of 50 years. It is noticeable that the proportion of meals and clothing experienced a considerable fall from 1965 to 2015
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the figure for housing and healthcare power saw a little rise. In 1965, 35% of the average household spent went on foodstuffs which was the largest pie chart.
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, by 2015,
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figure had fallen by 10%. During a given time the demand for clothing experienced a 7% per cent decrease from 12% to 5%.
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in terms of, Healthcare the proportion of spending in
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category made up 15% in 1965, after 50 years
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figure saw a sharp increase at 25% making it the second ๐Ÿฅˆ largest retail sector of all. In households, the smaller proportion of expending belonged to housing in the first ๐Ÿฅ‡ year,
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, in 2015, there was a one in twenty per cent rise from 30% to 35% in
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category by overtaking the foodstuff sector.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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