It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative or practical subjects for which they may have more aptitude. To what extent to do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and incude any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In recent decades,
art
has become a trend among young people, and it came into play in magazines and television worldwide, which has a significant influence for a variety of purposes. Parents claim that children
who lack of
artistic talent should not study in Remove the preposition
apply
art
classes. Instead
, toddlers should focus on other subjects
, or what they have interests with their more aptitude. In my opinion, I agree with this
idea as the natural talents of children
have more reliant on many other factors. This
essay will discuss perspective and explain in the ensuing paragraphs.
There are several reasons children
are required to learn based solely on their personalities. Firstly
, even if children
are studied what they take an interest in, they would make advance their innate talents in their subjects
, especially, by making easily
discoveries and development are able to maximize their talents, which exert more Change the word
easy
susceptible
to human resources for our country. Replace the word
susceptibility
For instance
, if teenagers love biological economics, they will study in classes to become doctors, and learning art
is not more likely necessary. Secondly
, by
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learning
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that
would not be caused situations, Correct pronoun usage
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such
as lost directions and no conscious
in the future. To illustrate, if young people Replace the word
consciousness
make
not a prediction regarding their jobs, it will increase the crime rate in metropolitan areas, which is Add a missing verb
do make
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the fully
fully
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full
reasons
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reason
from
learning Change preposition
for
arts
.
On the other hand
, the government should not force into
teenagers Change preposition
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learning
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to learn
arts
. In fact, one of thousand students certainly at least 50 Correct article usage
the arts
percent
people have Change the spelling
per cent
a
interest Change the article
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with
other Change preposition
in
subjects
, such
as math or foreign languages, due to
the horrible consequense
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consequence
consequences
with
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of
country
providing lack of human resources to produce products in the industry. Add an article
the country
Instead
, in order to resolving
the problem Change the verb
resolve
that
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apply
children
could select a subject what
they care about, which Correct word choice
that
support
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supports
to
the economy of Change preposition
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country
. Add an article
the country
a country
In addition
, by learning art
, children
who have less experience in life, they
will Correct pronoun usage
apply
easy
lose Replace the word
easily
concentrate
on Replace the word
concentration
other subject
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another subject
other subjects
due to
decreasing the result of professional qualification
at school. Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
For instance
, if children
only dedicatedly focus on learning arts
and forgets doing
homework, it will have an influence on their development and ability Change the verb form
to do
finding
jobs in the future.
In conclusion, parents and teachers should have a conversation to make a decision to choose appropriate Change the verb form
to find
subjects
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based
children
's personalities, and the government shoud
not take Correct your spelling
should
actions
to enforce toddler learning Fix the agreement mistake
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Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.