A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to make a suggestion about your sponsorship. Perhaps we could consider the advantages and disadvantages of two variations: local children’s sports teams and two open-air concerts. Let’s take a look at sponsoring the play team. The future of the generation will be in your arms. Some young adults could choose your company to work for when the time comes. It could increase your social rate in our area, and the community will be more loyal to your products.

Besides

, two open-air concerts perhaps will bring you some amount of money back, if you will be selling places to rent a tent

for example

. Of course, a lot of younger people prefer to listen to some music and have fun outside. Some tourists would rather be happy to join it too.

Overall

, if your company desires to grow in the local market may I suggest spending money on children’s athletics teams. If a company will invest not only in kids' futures, it will work on both sides. Reputation rises in the neighbouring areas, and happy parents and generations with sports archives will bring trusted consumers of the products you produce. I hope my recommendations were helpful. If there is anything else I can do, please call me. Yours faithfully, Daria L +84 576 92 45

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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