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More and more students are going abroad for higher studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is a fact that
students
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 nowadays prefer to continue their studies outside their mother country.
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 phenomenon will outweigh the drawbacks. The ability to explore more
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educational benefits to the country will be the main idea that
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, identity issues may be the drawbacks of being an international student.
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 with,
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 that have the opportunity to go abroad and pursue their higher level of
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 would be able to explore more in terms of the culture, and habits.
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,
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 will likely have a better idea of the cultural and habitual broadness all around the world. And if more people are aware of
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 particular issue, racism will no longer be an issue.
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 to that,
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 who studied abroad and managed to come back to their nation will likely increase the
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 quality in their motherland. A recent study suggests that countries that have a lot of overseas scholarship programs have higher scores in their general
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 system.
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,
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 have already settled down and have a great job opportunity tend to refuse to actually make an impact in their motherland.
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, they tend to forget who they really are.
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, some surveys that are held within the university that have a lot of international
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, suggest that 60% of the international
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 are not able to elaborate simple ideas using their native language anymore.
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, more
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 prefer to go overseas to continue their studies.
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higher
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 development in their motherland will be the advantage, lack of interest in their original nation may be the drawback of
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 phenomenon.

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task response
Well done in addressing the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad. Make sure to provide a clearer position on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages in your introduction.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Work on improving the transition between ideas to enhance coherence.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exposure
  • Global network
  • Immerse
  • Perspectives
  • Specialized programs
  • World-renowned
  • Adaptability
  • Independence
  • Navigating
  • Tuition fees
  • Living expenses
  • Currency differences
  • Homesickness
  • Cultural shock
  • Isolation
  • Adapting
  • Language barrier
  • Resume
  • Recognized
  • Valued
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