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Some people agree that children should ask for parents advice while others do not agree. Discuss both the ideas and give your opinion.

#people #children #parents #advice
Nowadays, some
part
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 of the community believe that
children
 should open up to their elders and ask for
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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.
However
, some
contradicts
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to
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this
 idea. In my opinion,
children
 ask their
parents
 for
advice
. Easy access to
the
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social media could mean harm to
the
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apply
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children
. Especially when making decisions that could impact their future life.
For example
,
children
 should consult their
parents
 on which university courses may be more beneficial for them. Asking
advice
 from
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your parent
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parent
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parents
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 is the best option because your
parents
 are the closest
one
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ones
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 to you,
thus
, they know what your strengths and weakness are.
Parents
 can help guide their
children
into
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 the right path.
Also
 when asking for
advice
 from your
parents
 you can build a strong bond with your
parents
.
For instance
, when I consult my
parents
 regarding my future regarding my studies I felt closer
with
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 them as they are always there for me and
motivates
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motivate
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 me to work hard for my dream.
On the other hand
, some
parents
 are too strict and
pressuring
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pressure
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 on their
children
. These
type
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 of
parents
 put immense pressure on their
children
 which could lead to anxiety and depression.
For instance
,
children
 who
does
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do
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 not receive the support they need are inclined to
feeling
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feel
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 stress more frequently in comparison with
children
 who
knows
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know
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 their
parents
 are there for them.
To conclude
, there are many benefits when asking
parents
 for
advice
 as they can help lead you the right way since they have more experiences in life.
Thus
, if
children
 take
advice
 from
parents
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their parents
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 they are more likely to succeed in life with
tehe
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the
 love and support they attain.
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