These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

Presently, more people
are prefer
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to
study
abroad or work in
a different counties
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different counties
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for a duration of time. there are many pros and cons to
work
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or
study
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in a different country and in the following of my essay, I will explain them. One of the main benefits of studying in a different country is a better
education
that will be provided by the universities
specially
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in Europe and the USA. Nowadays, many people are going to developed
countries
from underdeveloped
countries
. So the idea is very simple and almost every pupil follows the same track. They wish to get
in
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a better university, and after they graduate, they will find a better job.
For example
, In Iran, the majority of
students
who are eighteen years old, apply for a university in the USA, England etc so that they can have a better job
opportunity
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after finishing their
education
. Better
equipment
could be another positive aspect of studying abroad. The shortages of
equipment
in
the
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underdeveloped counties
is
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not adequate for the
students
who are seeking
for
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some specific fields.
Therefore
if the
equipment
and the facilities provided in an underdeveloped country’s university
not
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enough, they will find
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difficulties
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to learn a subject profoundly.
For instance
, the technology of some specific chip
is belong
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belongs
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to the USA,
therefore
the infrastructure facilities and laboratories in a country like Iran
is
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not sufficient for the
students
to
study
on
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the subject
that
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mentioned.
However
, the downside of moving to other
countries
is homesickness. The majority of
students
are facing homesickness and it is because they are far away from their parents. To tackle
on
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the problem, parents play a huge role to control their children so they can talk to their children to make them calm and encourage them to resume their
education
. In conclusion, despite there are some downsides like
the
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homesickness, many
students
consider that it is
worthy
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enough to
study
abroad because it provides many benefits like better
education
and the universities in
a
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developed
countries
provide better
equipment
and facilities for
the the
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students
who have a thirst for success and
gaining
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knowledge.
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