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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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Presently, more people
are prefer
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 to
study
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 abroad or work in
a different counties
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different counties
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 for a duration of time. there are many pros and cons to
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 or
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study
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 in a different country and in the following of my essay, I will explain them. One of the main benefits of studying in a different country is a better
education
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 that will be provided by the universities
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 in Europe and the USA. Nowadays, many people are going to developed
countries
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 from underdeveloped
countries
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. So the idea is very simple and almost every pupil follows the same track. They wish to get
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 a better university, and after they graduate, they will find a better job.
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, In Iran, the majority of
students
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 who are eighteen years old, apply for a university in the USA, England etc so that they can have a better job
opportunity
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 after finishing their
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. Better
equipment
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 could be another positive aspect of studying abroad. The shortages of
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 in
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underdeveloped counties
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 not adequate for the
students
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 who are seeking
for
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some specific fields.
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 if the
equipment
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 and the facilities provided in an underdeveloped country’s university
not
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 enough, they will find
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it difficulties
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difficulties
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 to learn a subject profoundly.
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, the technology of some specific chip
is belong
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 to the USA,
therefore
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 the infrastructure facilities and laboratories in a country like Iran
is
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 not sufficient for the
students
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 to
study
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on
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the subject
that
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mentioned.
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, the downside of moving to other
countries
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 is homesickness. The majority of
students
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 are facing homesickness and it is because they are far away from their parents. To tackle
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the problem, parents play a huge role to control their children so they can talk to their children to make them calm and encourage them to resume their
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. In conclusion, despite there are some downsides like
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homesickness, many
students
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 consider that it is
worthy
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 enough to
study
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 abroad because it provides many benefits like better
education
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 and the universities in
a
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apply
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developed
countries
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 provide better
equipment
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 and facilities for
the the
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students
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 who have a thirst for success and
gaining
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 knowledge.
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