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In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#books #internet #outweigh
Previously,
knowledge
was merely existed
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 in books,
however
 presently,
knowledge
 can be uploaded on the
internet
 and can be accessible to
million
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 and billions of people all around the world. In the following essay, I will discuss some pros and cons of uploading
knowledge
 on the
internet
. One of the main benefits of releasing
information
 on the
internet
 is that everyone is able to access the
information
 very quickly.
Internet
 is made for a better social bonding that can aggregate people in the same place.
For example
, if a new substance in chemistry is discovered. It is better to be uploaded on the
internet
 rather than in a book. and it is because everyone can access it instantly. Another positive
aspects
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 of uploading
knowledge
 on the
internet
 is that the
knowledge
 will be expanded in more quicker way
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than
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 in sharing
information
 in books. To elaborate
this
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 I will give you one main example. Imagine some findings about a meteor
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further
 observation. In
such
 cases the
information
 will be uploaded, allowing certain individuals who
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 the ability to solve the rest of the problem and contribute
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 investigation. One of
downsides
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 of uploading
the
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knowledge
 on the
internet
 is that all
information
 online cannot be trusted.
However
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 the books can be a trusted source of
information
. if
that is
 the case some fact-checking organization might be established in order to check the activity on the
internet
 and evaluate its validity
whether
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 it is qualified to be online. In conclusion, despite the fact that sharing
knowledge
 online has some benefits
such
 as everyone
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accessibility
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toward
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to
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 online
information
. Plus, the
information
 may expanded in a quicker way.
However
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 there are some
downside
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this
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such
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information
 on the
internet
 cannot be well trusted.
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task response
Ensure that the essay fully addresses the prompt and provides balanced arguments for advantages and disadvantages of uploading knowledge to the internet. Develop clear topic sentences and provide adequate supporting details for each point.
coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing the essay into clear paragraphs, with each paragraph focusing on a specific aspect of the topic. Use cohesive devices such as transition words and pronouns to link ideas and ensure a clear flow of information.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning
  • Virtual libraries
  • Cyberspace
  • Search engine literacy
  • Critical evaluation skills
  • Open-source information
  • Data mining
  • Intellectual property
  • Digital preservation
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