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The graph below shows the estimated number of cars manufactured in 4 countries between 2020 and 2035.

The graph below shows the estimated number of cars manufactured in 4 countries between 2020 and 2035.
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The graph illustrates the number of
cars
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 which are manufactured in four different countries from 2020 to 2035.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
nunber
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number
 of
cars
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 produced in China increased
while
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 the other countries decreased significantly in the given years. Starting at 100
thousand
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cars
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 in 2020, it is expected that China will see a continuation of
rise
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the rise
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 in the number of car production to about 150
thousand
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cars
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 after 15 years.
By contrast
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, Japan was the country which manufactured the most numbers of
cars
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 among all in 2020 with around 350
thousand
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cars
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.
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, it is predicted that
this
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 will reach the peak of approximately 380
thousand
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cars
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, which
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however
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, will fall to 100
thousand
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cars
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 by 2035.
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,
although
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 in 2020 the figures for the USA and the UK were 300 and 200
thousand
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cars
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 respectively, and
then
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 it is anticipated that these countries will share a similar decrease and will hit the bottom of under 50
thousands
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thousand
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cars
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 by 2035.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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