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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums or money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transpor. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Spending
money
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 on
transport
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 is the topic of discussion.
Although
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 Some think the
money
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 needs to be spent on building new lines for fast trains, others, myself included, believe it should be spent on public
transport
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. The first reason would be about the rush hours
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 a lot of cars with one passenger and they usually have a long way to go to their houses or workplace.
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, Tehrani
people
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 who live in the capital of Iran and the citizens need to commute every day, by public
transport
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, they can make it easy. So, having good Pubic
transport
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 can affect rush hours.
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, public
transport
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 can help
people
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 to access everywhere easily because public
transport
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 has its own roads.
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, the metro , Subway and Buses. These ways are so comfortable and these are so common to reach anywhere.
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, Funding public
transport
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 is vital and can improve accessibility. Some may argue that spending
money
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 on constructing fast train ways is important because they think, it can help to commute among cities and the
people
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 can use a better service.
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,
people
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 Can use
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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instead
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 of trains if they want an easy way to commute and
also
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 they can get good service with old rails too, there should not be any problems. In conclusion, the
money
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 has to be spent on public
transport
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 for two reasons, it can improve the rush hours and
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 in
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 way,
People
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 can commute easily.
On the other hand
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, Some individuals believe that it's better to spend on train rails for some reasons which can not be an issue in my opinion.
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