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In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tution fees. Not all students can afford them, so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. Do you agree or disagree with this?

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Worldwide, there is a growing debate over whether
tuition
fees
 for studying at university should be free or not. And especially in Europe, most of the younger people are getting involved in the movement for free
tuition
fees
.
However
, I disagree with that statement. These days,
tuition
fees
 are increasing more and more.
Due to
 increasing
tuition
fees
, some
students
 do not want to continue their studies and they are willing to quit and want to replace by other jobs that do not require graduation.
This
 is a really big
problem
 in
this
 association.
Therefore
, the public requires equal education without paying
fees
.
In addition
, in the past, a great many famous thinkers thought that education should be equal for everyone. But
this
 can cause another social
problem
. That
problem
 might be the basic structures of the economy of the nation.
Firstly
, if
tuition
fees
 are free, someone should pay that
instead
 of
students
 who do not pay. If the government is willing to pay for
students
, there are just a few options to solve. If the government is going to pay
instead
 of
students
, they should print the amount of money themselves or they have to collect taxes from people more than before. If
this
 method would continue from year to year, inflation comes often to society and tax rates will go up high continually. And
according to
 a survey, most people aged 25-40 do not want to give more taxes to the government, because they know well that the tax rate of a nation has been increasing over and over.
Secondly
, equal education with free cost could have problems with the competition for
students
. Without
tuition
fees
, is going to be able to apply to the great university and everyone just wants to go to the university. Through that other universities can be in trouble in many ways. Those difficulties would be related to raising
students
 and funding. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I disagree with that statement. And I believe, we still have better solutions to solve
this
problem
 for individuals and associations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equal opportunity
  • higher education
  • educated and skilled workforce
  • student loans
  • graduate
  • debt burden
  • incentivize
  • pursue
  • educational attainment
  • knowledge-based economy
  • social mobility
  • low-income students
  • socioeconomic status
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • skilled labor
  • overcrowded classrooms
  • quality of education
  • public funding
  • higher taxes
  • reallocation of resources
  • essential services
  • mixed model
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