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Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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On average
people
 spend
one third
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 of life at
work
. It is important to feel comfortable at a job. Modern offices are designed as
open-space
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open space
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,
however
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 there were more separate cabinets previously. There are much discussion revolving around the issue of whether compartmentalized floor plans are the best option for
work space
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workspace
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 management. Private offices
work
 well for productivity. In
this
case
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people
 don’t
disturbed
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 each other and concentrate more on their own tasks.
For instance
, a colleague who wants to share his/her jokes wouldn't interrupt you from
work
 over the course of a day. So you will have the opportunity to focus on your issues and achieve optimal output. Nowadays more and more companies use cubicles as the best decision for place employers. Cubicles are spaces sectioned off with walls but not a separate room for
work
.
This
 kind of space organisation helps to interact with
people
. A standout example of
this
 would be the next story. Nick and
Gilian
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Gillian
 are colleagues in the financial department. In the morning Nick noticed his colleague was sad. He wanted to cheer her up.
Sincere
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 smile can lead to a good mood, quite easy to present smiles when your tables are spaced closely. On the basis of the above discussion, I believe that the advantages of open-space offices outweigh the disadvantages. Open designs are perfect for the social life of employers. Common areas facilitate interactions. Companies that deny individual rooms take care
about
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 mental health,
how
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and how
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people
 in the company feel.
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