It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is acquiring a knowledge of the difference between right and wrong for children vital or not. Now people are beginning to realize that we have another option of explaining

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of punishing them. Personally, I tend to think that punishing them is the best way to explain something to them, things kind as these activities have a negative influence on you and so on.

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, it is well known that when parents or teachers are punishing children it is not for fun or from negative imagination or something like

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, they want to fix them. What I mean here is that you must know that they wish us all the best in our life, and they do not want us to repeat their mistakes or something like

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. A good case in point is my parents always correct me, if I have a wrong thinking or I did something wrong.

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be argued that nowadays, in a fast-paced world, we have a lot of strong psychologists and they are giving us plenty of decisions to solve

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problem,

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as just trying to talk to them or starting a conversation with them about what is good or bad in the world. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that probably new methods are better than punishment,

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, for ,me a person who grew up with the punishment method seems better because during the punishment we have to realize that we did something wrong and we will not repeat

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action in the future.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

273 words

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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.

Fully explain your ideas

Cooking food is a waste of time in today’s hectic life. Fast food restaurants are helpful in modern living and it is less stressful. Do you agree or disagree?

International tourism has become a huge industry in the world. Do the problems of international travel outweigh its advantages?

Study needs time, peace and comfort, whereas employment needs the same thing. Someone says it is impossible to combine those two because one distracts one another. Do you think this is realistic in our life today?