It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is acquiring a knowledge of the difference between right and wrong for children vital or not. Now people are beginning to realize that we have another option of explaining
instead
of punishing them. Personally, I tend to think that punishing them is the best way to explain something to them, things kind as these activities have a negative influence on you and so on.
Firstly
, it is well known that when parents or teachers are punishing children it is not for fun or from negative imagination or something like
this
, they want to fix them. What I mean here is that you must know that they wish us all the best in our life, and they do not want us to repeat their mistakes or something like
this
. A good case in point is my parents always correct me, if I have a wrong thinking or I did something wrong.
On the other hand
, it can
also
be argued that nowadays, in a fast-paced world, we have a lot of strong psychologists and they are giving us plenty of decisions to solve
this
problem,
such
as just trying to talk to them or starting a conversation with them about what is good or bad in the world. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that probably new methods are better than punishment,
however
, for ,me a person who grew up with the punishment method seems better because during the punishment we have to realize that we did something wrong and we will not repeat
this
action in the future.
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