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The chart below shows the proporsional of Energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.

The chart below shows the proporsional of Energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.
THE
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The
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 two pie charts Compare the percentage of six categories (other renewable, oil, nuclear, hydrogen,
chala
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Chala
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 and natural gas). In general, the main
kinds
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kind
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 of
Energy
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 produced was oil with
32
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a 32
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% contribution
39
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of 39
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% in
Energy
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 production.
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 nuclear had fallen 5% in 2003.
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this
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 figure for chala and natural gas saw a small rise. In 1985 , 52%
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of an
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an
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the
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 average
Energy
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 produced went
in
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into
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 oil which is the largest pie
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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chart
however
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 by 2093 the figure big for
this
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 category had fallen by 39% . In 2003 the demand for nuclear experienced a considerable fall from 22% Toshkent 17% .
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, in terms of gas the percentage of
Energy
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producer
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producers
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this
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in this
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 category made up 13% in 1985 and
then
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18
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in 18
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 years
this
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 figure saw a Sharp increase
at
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to
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 23% .
The
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smalll
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small
 percentage of
Energy
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 produced belonged to coal in the first year,
however
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next
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the next
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 year period there was a 5% rose in
this
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 category.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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