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Some People Think That It Is Better To Spend Money To Eliminate The Cause Of Crime

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In today's world , where
money
 can buy anything and practically everything, many people do think that
cause
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the cause
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 of
crime
 can be removed through
money
. In
this
 essay , I will present both sides of the discussion and will present my take on
this
 debate. In modern times,
money
 is
single
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the single
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 most essential medium you can barter to gain anything you want. Investing funds in building
better
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a better
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 model for early
crime
 detection and stopping at the very right moment can prevent many hazards and save lives.
Morever
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Moreover
, it will provide
better
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a better
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 place for
public
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the public
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 to thrive and enjoy life.
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, in many developing or
under developed
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 nations, poverty is
main
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 culprit for most types of
crime
.
Therefore
, if
money
 is invested in eradicating
the
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poverty will eventually lower the
crime
 arising
due to
this
 reason. Having said that, on the other side of the coin, it might be practically not possible to eradicate all the causes of
crime
 .
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 : love hatred and jihad crimes are the kind of
the
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crime
 which are
emotion driven
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 and no amount of
money
 can help
prevent
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. In my conclusion, capital if spent after thoughtful research can help
removal
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the removal
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 of specific kinds of
crime
.
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