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Some people think that only the best students should be rewarded. Others, however, think that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Traditionally, the school would
reward
 top
students
 with the highest scores or best performance, but some people believe that the
reward
 should be granted to
students
 who have made obvious progress. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
this
 issue from both sides. It is quite reasonable to
reward
 those excellent
students
 because they deserve the prize. The number of prizes is limited, so they should be given to those really outstanding
students
.
This
 would encourage a sense of competition between
students
, as they know they need to become the best to get recognized by other people. The top
students
 are expected to set a good example for other
students
 and the award can become an incentive for
students
 to
study
 hard and excel in their
study
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studies
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.
However
, some people believe the competition between children may lead to pressure, which is not good
to
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 children’s psychological health. It is impossible for everyone to take first place in an exam, so the
reward
 system should be revised. If we could
reward
 those
students
 who show great progress in their
study
 and
behavior
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, even the “worst” student would have the motivation to change, and
this
 would help
students
 develop a positive attitude towards
study
 and life. In my opinion, the purpose of education is to create an environment in which every student can fully develop their talents. In
this
 sense, it is more important to praise and
reward
students
 who have made improvements than those who are the best. Teachers and parents should make children understand that life is not a competition with others, but a journey of self-improvement.
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