Taking a year of between finishing school and starting university is a waste of students' time. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days taking
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regarding study, break and choice of field is very important because there is a lot of competition in every sector of life. Before commenting
my
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decision that either
students
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student
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should take a year
of
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off
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between school and starting university or not, we should discuss both
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views.
To begin
with, some students want to get ahead of everyone and finish their studies on time to
fulfill
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their dream.
Also
, they want to work hard and do not want to break their link with
studies
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their studies
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.
According to
them, taking a break would make them lazy and it will delay everything.
On the other hand
, half of the youth would like to take a break before starting university because they believe that it will be a lot of pressure on them.
Moreover
, they would like to take some
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experience by working full time and saving
them
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some money to pay the
tution
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tuition
fee for university or college and for other essentials needed.
For instance
, my friend started working in
insurance
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the insurance
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company as she wanted to start her own
buisness beacuse
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business because
she was thinking to take
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a buisness
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buisness
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business
management course in future.
To conclude
, I agree with the statement because it is
benificial
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beneficial
to take a year off as it will refresh a person's mind and give them some
real life
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experience, which will in return help them to choose what they want their future to look like.
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