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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today,some
children
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 spend too many hours in their daily life using
smartphones
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.From my perspective,I think it is a positive development in their childhood. On the one hand,with the development of technology,mobile phones become more intelligent to solve problems in everyday life.
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,
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 who
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smartphones
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 could tackle some questions which they have never seen before.So it is a convenient way to look for some information on the Internet.
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,when some
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 do their homework or assignments,they encounter a difficult problem that teachers do not know how to overcome,they could
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 a smartphone to refer to relevant information on Baidu or Google.It is quite a steady way to learn different knowledge and overcome trouble in their free
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.Maybe someone thinks it will waste too much
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 to look for information through a smartphone.But I think it is worth spending some
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 to achieve knowledge.So using smartphone have positive developments in daily life.
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,
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 have the same ability to calculate as computers but are smaller than them.
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,
children
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 can
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 phones to relax in their free
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.Because playing games or connecting with friends on mobile phones can make
children
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 funny and enjoy themselves after a busy
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.
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,after class,
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 can play digitally with their friends or make phone calls to their families.
This
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 function is not only convenient for their lives but
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 enhances friendship with different friends.So using
smartphones
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 has quite a positive influence on their lives. In conclusion,it is useful for
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 to
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smartphones
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 every day,not only can rich their leisure
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 but
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 reinforce their knowledge without teachers and classes.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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