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The given charts below compare water usage in San Diego,California and the rest of the world.

The given charts below compare water usage in San Diego,California and the rest of the world.
The given three
pie
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 charts illustrate 3
catogories
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categories
 of
water
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usage
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 in San Diego,California and
also
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 across the globe. It is noticeable that the
proportionof
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proportion of
proportion
 using
water
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 for
residental
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residential
 experienced a considerable fall over the past period
while
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this
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 figure for agriculture saw a big rise. In San Diego,60% of
water
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usage
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 went on
residental
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residential
 was the largest
pie
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 of the chart.
However
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,in California,
this
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 figure for
this
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 category had fallen by 21% and
8-percent-amount
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8-per cent-amount
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 was showed the
last
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 years over the world.During the years ,the demand for agriculture experienced
52
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percent
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 increase from 17% to 69% and it was a sharp increase that
making
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made
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 it the largest
pie
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of
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apply
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the
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chart.The third
water
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usage
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 was for
industry
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the industry
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.
In
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At
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 the beginning of the period,its rate was 23%.By
constract
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contrast
,
in
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apply
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 California ,
it
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apply
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 experienced
10-percent-rise
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a 10-percent-rise
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 and there was 8
percent
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per cent
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water
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usage
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in
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worldwide which made up the smallest
pie
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 in the shown chart.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, water, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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