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The plans below show a public park when it is first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

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The maps illustrate the layouts of Grange
Park
 in the past, in 1920 and in the present.
Overall
,
the
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significant changes can be seen from the relocations and additional features of the
park
. The stage for musicians is reshaped to a half-circular model, and there is
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an amphitheater
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amphitheater
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 for concerts. In the middle of the
park
, the water fountain is replaced by a rose
garden
that is
 surrounded by four seats
where
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 in 1920 the rose
garden
 and the seats were majority spread around the stage for musicians. Another rose
garden
 was near to entrance from Arnold Avenue. Today, a café is built to replace the
garden
. Next to the café, there is
children’s
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 play area, which was
pond
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a pond
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 for water plants in the past.
Along with
 the glasshouse and the other seats were diminished to develop
water
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a water
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 feature. The
park
 now has access not only from Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street but
also
 from
underground
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the underground
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 car
park
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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