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The chart below Show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.

The chart below Show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.
#show #government #expenditure
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The two pie charts Compare the
percentage
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 of
five
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 categories
government
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of government
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 spending between 2010 and 2015. It is noticeable that the
percentage
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 of spending
defence
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on defence
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 and education experienced a significant fall over the
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five
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five-year
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year
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 period
while
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this
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 figure for welfare and interest on borrowing saw a small rose. In 2010, 17% average expenditure went on defence
however
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, by 2015 the figure for
this
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 category had fallen by 14% .
During
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Five
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five
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year
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years
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 ago,the demand for education government spending a considerable fall from 24% to 21%.
By contrast
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, in terms of
welfare
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,welfare
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 the
percentage
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 of expenditure
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this
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in this
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 category made up 8% in 201,after
five
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 years
this
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 figure saw a small increase at 13% . The s
percentage
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 of expenditure belonged to interest on borrowing in the first
year
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,
however
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 next
year
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 period there was a 5% rise in
this
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 category.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, five, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • allocation
  • budget
  • fiscal
  • increased/decreased spending
  • percentage
  • funding
  • infrastructure
  • public services
  • education
  • healthcare
  • recreation
  • welfare
  • economic conditions
  • fiscal policy
  • trend
  • analysis
  • comparative
  • significant
  • allocate
  • reallocate
  • subsidize
  • cutbacks
  • deficit
  • surplus
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