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Many young children today leave school with a negative attitude towards learning. Why is this happening? What can be done to encourage young people to have a positive attitude towards learning?

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Teenagers do not interest in learning at
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 so they leave
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thesedays
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these days
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 issue is being covered by a lot of media today. In the following essay, I will discuss a couple of major causes of the issue and suggest some possible solutions to the problem. The first reason is that younger
children
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 can not go to
school
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 because they have
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 machines.
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, my friend was preparing to
study
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 after he out to
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. To be specific, he can
study
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 only
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Interent
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Internet
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 as online courses,searching
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 lead to enhance knowledge about much
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information.
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, he passed to exams without going to
school
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. Another reason is that it is hard to
study
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 because of having not
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 curriculum. Through
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 situation, students have
not
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no
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 interest in their studies. The first solution is that At
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, they should make
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 computer labs and share various materials.
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, if the government support to more computer labs
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 can search the Internet,
children
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 would gain knowledge anytime.
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, teenagers
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 have lots of information about visual things.The second solution is that
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school
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 make consulting for
children
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 after
school
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, when my friend did
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 at
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, he thinks that he can rise confidence about doing
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study
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 is because he became to
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 which can
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study
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his
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parts of
study
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. In conclusion, the possibility of the topic
that
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children
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 can
study
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 with electronic devices without going to
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 and there
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curricular
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of
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for
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 individuals.
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, If the
school
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to
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childrens
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children
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, it would be
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to
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solutions
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