Space travel has been possible for some time. Some people think space tourism could be developed in the future which can help to develop countries' economies. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, the
development
of advanced technology has proved that
space
travel
is no longer an assumption. There are a number of people who believe that
space
tourism would be potential in the future which can help to increase the state budget;
whereas
, there are a lot of problems that may be caused by
this
development
. From my perspective, I believe that the drawbacks do outweigh the benefits. There are various benefits
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the
development
of
space
tourism.
Firstly
,
besides
astronauts, people can expand their knowledge about
space
and be able to see the solar system with their own eyes by paying their money to
travel
around it. Almost everyone can only imagine how the Earth and other planets look
like
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through books or lessons at school so
that
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they would be curious about the
space
travel
industry.
Secondly
, the amount of money people spend to
travel
to
space
will be a huge contribution to the state budget which will help to develop countries' economies. In spite of the benefits mentioned above, I believe that the
space
travel
industry might bring lots of bad effects in the future. Emissions from
space
rockets will damage the atmosphere and increase air pollution. Carbon dioxide will release into the air and cause greenhouse gasses which affect the human lung.
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about health, male physiology will be declined by flying inside the spaceship
with
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high speed.
Therefore
, it is very dangerous when accidents happen which are difficult to carry out immediately.
Lastly
, oil is running out day by day when rockets require a high amount of oil to ply into
space
so that
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it
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will lead to resource depletion. In conclusion, it seems to me that we lose more than we gain from the
development
of
space
travel
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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