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Study overseas while they come to be a more marketable where student face many difficulties what is the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

#study #student #face #difficulties #trend
Education is
the
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 strong tool
to
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 success.Candidates move to different countries for
betterment
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for
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 their future and living status.There are merits and demerits
for
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this
 trend.
Firstly
,everyone in
this
 world
aim
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 for
good
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a good
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life
.Striving the days in
the
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modern society is hectic.
Therefore
 younger generations
is
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 in a competition for the early winning and successful career.
For instance
, The United Kingdom is a hub for many candidates from all over the world.The average number of students moving to
the
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Britain skyrocketed. They can study and do
part time
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 jobs and gain a peaceful
life
 utilizing the resources . It not only helps to achieve a certificate
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but
also
 enhance to upgrade the basic living standards.
On the other hand
,it is apparently evident that teens
starts
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 to think about
this
 migration from their schooling itself. Even though
,
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 the certificate from these foreign countries help them to level up,
eventually
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 companies may stop hiring them as they are too huge in number.
Therefore
 there is a high chance to expel them from
the
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overseas because of the contest between the native job dwellers and the foreigners.
In addition
,it is common that
the
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children may even suffer from homesickness and
adjusting
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 issues as soon as they land in a different place. They have to fight themselves to gain mental
tranquility
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 to make
the
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 new
life
 a habit.
To conclude
,Students move to other lands away from their home countries in search of qualified education and jobs.Nurturing own
life
 is the responsibility of every single man
in
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this
 globe.As the developed places
attracts
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 and
invests
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on
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 people, especially the blooming generations,it is helpful to use the opportunities.But candidates may struggle to strive through the obstacles as they are away from their
home
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 and face a lot of withstanding issues.
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