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The line graph shows thefts per thousands vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousands vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph below presents information about
car
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thefts
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 in Great Britain, Sweden, France, and Canada between 1990 and 1999. The value is given in thousands.
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, we see that
Greait
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Great
 Britain has the highest rates of vehicle
thefts
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 in the 1990s.
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 France and Canada keep a steady low incidence of
car
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thefts
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 in the period, Sweden experiences and major increase. In Great
Britain
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 almost 18 000 vehicles were robbed in 1990. The figures fluctuated with two tops in 1992 and 1996 reaching around 20k stolen cars.
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, Sweden, which was the second largest country in terms of
car
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thefts
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, kept second place
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 but had a substantial increase in
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 particular crime. From 1990 to 1999 there was a 50% increase in
car
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thefts
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, reaching around 15 thousand missing cars
at the end
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 of the period. The country with the lowest
stolen
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 vehicle in 1990 was France.
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, the figures in Canada dropped three consecutive years reaching the lowest in 1993 with less than 5000 cars reported stolen. The French
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 experienced fluctuation in the number of
car
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thefts
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; rates measuring between 6 and 8 thousand vehicles.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, thefts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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