The pie chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

The pie chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.
Given pie charts illustrate the causes
for
Change preposition
of
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transport by cycle or by driving a car. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
,two main reasons for people who prefer bicycles to go to
work
are health and fitness
as well as
less pollution.
While
, for the public that prefer
cars
to travel to
work
gave us high percentages on reasons
such
as comfort and distance. The need to carry things to
work
and safety for those who go to
work
by car showed the same results,and
also
for individuals that chose to keep healthy and fit and for less pollution. Members of society who picked cycling showed 30% on both health and fitness and help to keep the environment less polluted.
In contrast
,those who travel to
work
by car prioritized comfort -which is 40% -over the rest of the part .
Also
,the distance between home and
work
is the second reason and showed 21% after the comfortableness. Not facing parking concerns which is 15 % showed almost the same results with just 2 per cent lower for no cost for bikes.The figure for the need for a place to carry things is 14% for the public that chose
cars
,
while
the safety of
cars
rather than bikes was the lowest with only 11%. People who considered the fastness of bikes showed 12%
while
the proportion for those who chose
cars
was slightly higher with just 2% and showed 14% respectively.
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