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It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Work-
life
balance
 means making a
balance
 between your work and your
life
. Many people argue that
life
balance
 requires our
life
 to enjoy more and live as a happy person.
While
, others think that if someone wants to increase his fingerprint for humanity, he should give himself completely to his carrier or to his passion. I completely accept acting as a main actor in our daily work because we have only one
life
 and we must try hard in order to expand our impact on humanity. On the one hand, normal people have a simple
life
, eats, acts, and works like
normal
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a normal
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 person
as well as
 makes a
balance
 between the thing that they want to do and their daily routines.
For example
, normal people work about 6-8 hours per day to achieve a salary for continuing their
life
 and enjoying it.
On the other hand
, the person who carries a very good message and wants to make a huge thing for human beings
,
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 needs to sow seeds that benefit others. And it is not easy, it requires a human hardworking.
For instance
, if you become an actor in a movie, and you are one of the main actors, you should act like a battle, and
instead
 of working 8 hours, you have to spend the whole of your time
for
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sending your message properly. In conclusion, our lives are under our decisions. We can choose a normal balanced
life
 and enjoy more in
life
 or forget
life
balance
 and try hard,
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 all of our time working to make seeds that benefit humans.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Well-being
  • Productivity
  • Fulfilling
  • Time management
  • Prioritize
  • Burnout
  • Boundaries
  • Dedication
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Efficiency
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